Wednesday 4 September 2013

More Writing


A day at the beach
SC: Exciting verbs, Adverbs, and adjectives
      Use one Simile, one metaphor,  onomatopoeia and personification
      Alliteration

I made soft footprints in the crisp sand as I strolled towards the crystal clear water. The sun gave my skin a bronze colour. The water lapped around me peacefully as I waded in. My surfboard glided on the surface, and I saw a wave form out in the Hawaiian ocean. My glistening blond hair shone like the sun, and my muscles rippled beneath my olive skin. I heard the wave punch the surface with a CRASH and I paddled in further, anticipating the next wave. I saw it form on the horizon, beautiful like a glass vase. It came nearer, and when I was almost face to face to it I quickly ducked underneath the water. It was like I was frozen in time. My surfboard slowly glided through the clear water. I saw beautiful fish, swimming majestically past me in a bouquet of colour. I tasted the sharp tang of salt on my tongue and felt the water lift my hair up. With my fingers I propelled myself forward and glided for a second, smiling.  The sparkling sand turned underneath me, and I heard the water crash above me, then I shot up quickly, a torpedo shooting up, until I hit the surface, then sun reflecting on the glistening water drops, crawling caterpillars on my back. I started to paddle back to shore with my prune fingers, and vowed to myself that I would come back the next day.



You can do it Team!
SC: Exciting verbs, Adverbs, and adjectives
      Use one Simile, one metaphor,  onomatopoeia and personification
      Alliteration

3,2,1, GO! I yelled out, giving the order to throw. Colourful balls flew through the air around me, and adrenaline raced through my blood. I drew my arm back, a ball in my hand. I felt my muscles tighten, and then I pushed my arm forward quickly. I let the ball go, and I watched it fly through the air. It hit someone’s head with the ball, and they threw the ball on the ground in frustration. A ball came flying through the air at me, it screamed at me as it went past and I bent my back to the side. WHOOSH I felt the ball fly past me. I felt like superman, proud as I realised my team-mates thinning out. I was one of the last ones left! I smiled happily, then bent down to pick up a ball rolling past my feet. I threw it with such force, that the person I hit fell onto the ground, clutching their stomach. They slunk slowly off the course, gutted that they had been hit. I bent down to pick up a ball, quickly, but when I was coming up a ball hit me on the leg. “No!” I yelled out as I realised what had happened. I was a mouse, slowly shuffling off to the ever growing line. I watched in desperation as my team was slowly taken out. When there was one person left, the opposing team took all the balls and threw them, most hitting her,  making her cry. She flopped to the ground. I watched her with sympathy, then congratulated the team half heartedly. “Good game.”

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